Much better. Like Bert says, the bars are a little distracting, and are unfortunately a bugger to get round to get the perfect shot.
That said, I love the brown lines on his face. One round the eye and one round his mush.
You also have the focus on the eye, which is imperative to a good shot
Kinda looks like he's looking at me saying "One step closer and you're getting nibbled, son"