[stupot]

Been going through some old shots (as i haven't taken any new shots in ages) and came across this one had a little play in PS.

c&c please

[Charlotte]

Very good! His eyes immediately grab you - which is traditionally exactly what you want - as the eyes have the clearest/strongest detail + colours.

His skintone is a bit on the pale side, and I'd like to see a bit more shadow (subtle of course) for a bit of modelling to his face, particularly on his left side (on our right) where the tone seems the flattest.

His mouth bugs me a bit: The colours + toning seem patchy, and the way it looks as if he might have something in his mouth (maybe a sweet) is distracting, 'cos I keep trying to work out what it is!

Hair could be a bit sharper.

Composition - great! although I would like to see the complete neck-binding of his Tshirt, rather than it being clipped.

Exposure - it leaves me wondering whether you were attempting a high key image that didn't quite reach high key, or high key didn't really suit the image, I can't make my mind up which.

DoF + focus are great.

I think it's very good, and maybe my nits are too picky

Edit: On studying it some more, it's the black BG that doesn't go with the high key effect IMO. And looking at his hair against the black BG, I can see it's a cutout. So it's the BG that seems to be the weak link here.

[Dave]

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[stupot]

Originally Posted by Charlotte

His skintone is a bit on the pale side, and I'd like to see a bit more shadow (subtle of course) for a bit of modelling to his face, particularly on his left side (on our right) where the tone seems the flattest..

This was a bit of a strange one, originally i set out to do a B&W conversion but lost those big brown eyes so i opted for muted colours (has an almost porcelain look) i sort of stumbled across this whilst fiddling and kind of liked it, so not really trying for the highkey look!

Originally Posted by Charlotte

His mouth bugs me a bit: The colours + toning seem patchy, and the way it looks as if he might have something in his mouth (maybe a sweet) is distracting, 'cos I keep trying to work out what it is!

He was just pulling a silly face

Originally Posted by Charlotte

Edit: On studying it some more, it's the black BG that doesn't go with the high key effect IMO. And looking at his hair against the black BG, I can see it's a cutout. So it's the BG that seems to be the weak link here.

yes well spotted, the background was a little cluttered so have darkened it, obviously still room for improvement there

Thanks for your comments, this was actually just a snapshot taken about a year ago of which i have many but was just try to see if i could improve on, see if i could make it less like a snapshot, of which i'm quite happy still along way to go before i'm comfortable with portraits though.