Critique requested :)

The Edge · 02-03-2005, 16:42

Again, this did a lot worse than i felt it should in the aforemetioned comp:-

Theme is The Modern World.

Picture title "Relics in a Throwaway Society"

Larger link here:- http://premium1.uploadit.org/chrismartin00/relics1.jpg

It beat Matty's but thats about all!

Someone said that the wrinkled cloth didn't help.

What do you guys think?

Matty · 02-03-2005, 17:58

yeah the background lets it down really, maybe a different background would have given a different feel to it as the background is very domineering...

The Edge · 02-03-2005, 18:05

Thats interesting.

I thought the background looked quite drab and added to the "old relic" feel that i wanted to generate. I had the problem of finding something that the videotape would show up on - plain black was out! I didn't think a light colour was appropriate, again because of the feel necessary.

The wrinkles were not entirely deliberate, but again added - IMO - to the unkempt and unwanted feel.

Maybe it would have been better in black and white...............

Thanks for the thoughts - please keep them coming

Matty · 02-03-2005, 18:33

try it in black and white, it may make a difference!

MyPix · 02-03-2005, 18:40

rather than B&W , you could possibly turn it to a ' negative ' ,

this would make the tape stand out and transform the look quite a bit,
maybe , lol ????

MyPix

markyg · 02-03-2005, 20:41

Ok "critique requested"? Well then here`s mine.

It doesn`t grab me. As a newcomer to photogtaphy I may not appreciate the intracisisies of the photo and what it took to produce it but then I bet most people wouldnt. Some photos grab people (and I grudgingly :lol: give Pook the honour of that foto he posted with the girl slumped in the chair) and some don`t. This one doesnt grab me in any way. In a gallery I would glance at it and move on. Nothing in it makes me want to stop and examine the image to see if there is anything I have missed on first inspection.

Again I am a noob and this is only my opinion, take it or leave it for what its worth!

02-03-2005, 21:14

For want of a better way to put it, without being brutal, at first glance, it looks like an eBay picture.
Quite busy, and even though I recognise every single one of those items (for what they are and their age), it took me a while to "decode" the image.
Nothing hit me straight away, certainly not the title you gave.

I don't mean to be brutal or offensive with that, merely an honest opinion of what my eyes saw, and what my brain thought.

I can see the good bits about the shot too, its just thats what my first impressions are

Now for that title, I would have done something like a needle and thread, or a sewing machine. Or a pair of elbow patches

But if I've been to harsh in my comments, please don't be afraid to tell me

Regards

The Edge · 02-03-2005, 23:47

That's fine guys, harsh is as good as anything

I wanted new but obsolete equipment, hence the choice if subjects.

We play a subjective game here, and because i choose something that grabs me doesn't mean it will grab everyone or even anyone.

I just wanted to be sure it was actually me

02-03-2005, 16:42	#1 (permalink)
The Edge Getting Comfy Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Birmingham Posts: 112	Critique requested :) Again, this did a lot worse than i felt it should in the aforemetioned comp:- Theme is The Modern World. Picture title "Relics in a Throwaway Society" Larger link here:- http://premium1.uploadit.org/chrismartin00/relics1.jpg It beat Matty's but thats about all! Someone said that the wrinkled cloth didn't help. What do you guys think?

02-03-2005, 20:41	#6 (permalink)
markyg New here Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Fife, Scotland Posts: 19	Ok "critique requested"? Well then here`s mine. It doesn`t grab me. As a newcomer to photogtaphy I may not appreciate the intracisisies of the photo and what it took to produce it but then I bet most people wouldnt. Some photos grab people (and I grudgingly :lol: give Pook the honour of that foto he posted with the girl slumped in the chair) and some don`t. This one doesnt grab me in any way. In a gallery I would glance at it and move on. Nothing in it makes me want to stop and examine the image to see if there is anything I have missed on first inspection. Again I am a noob and this is only my opinion, take it or leave it for what its worth! __________________ Don`t Know What I`m Doing.......Yet!!

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02-03-2005, 17:58	#2 (permalink)
Matty Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: kings hill Posts: 5,269	yeah the background lets it down really, maybe a different background would have given a different feel to it as the background is very domineering...

02-03-2005, 18:05	#3 (permalink)
The Edge Getting Comfy Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Birmingham Posts: 112	Thats interesting. I thought the background looked quite drab and added to the "old relic" feel that i wanted to generate. I had the problem of finding something that the videotape would show up on - plain black was out! I didn't think a light colour was appropriate, again because of the feel necessary. The wrinkles were not entirely deliberate, but again added - IMO - to the unkempt and unwanted feel. Maybe it would have been better in black and white............... Thanks for the thoughts - please keep them coming

02-03-2005, 18:33	#4 (permalink)
Matty Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: kings hill Posts: 5,269	try it in black and white, it may make a difference!

02-03-2005, 18:40	#5 (permalink)
MyPix Forum Regular Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Gloucester UK Posts: 745	rather than B&W , you could possibly turn it to a ' negative ' , this would make the tape stand out and transform the look quite a bit, maybe , lol ???? MyPix

02-03-2005, 21:14	#7 (permalink)
Marcel Posts: n/a	For want of a better way to put it, without being brutal, at first glance, it looks like an eBay picture. Quite busy, and even though I recognise every single one of those items (for what they are and their age), it took me a while to "decode" the image. Nothing hit me straight away, certainly not the title you gave. I don't mean to be brutal or offensive with that, merely an honest opinion of what my eyes saw, and what my brain thought. I can see the good bits about the shot too, its just thats what my first impressions are Now for that title, I would have done something like a needle and thread, or a sewing machine. Or a pair of elbow patches But if I've been to harsh in my comments, please don't be afraid to tell me Regards

02-03-2005, 23:47	#8 (permalink)
The Edge Getting Comfy Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Birmingham Posts: 112	That's fine guys, harsh is as good as anything I wanted new but obsolete equipment, hence the choice if subjects. We play a subjective game here, and because i choose something that grabs me doesn't mean it will grab everyone or even anyone. I just wanted to be sure it was actually me