[TIM]

Another from the same series of photo's, this time with a bit of a dragan effect applied in post to highlight the grittyness and desperatness...

Any crits and comments appreciated...

[TIM]

Looking at on the blue/white pixalo display and I think it really needs a black border... agreed?

[Markulous]

Border would look good - seperates it from the rest of page (using grey default here)

Think I'd like to see more space down RHS - not to just decentre it

[Whipspeed]

Agree with Mark, slightly more space on the right hand side would work with the shape of the hand.

[Rob Barron]

Not really sure about the shadow in this one, it is so dark I can't see the edge of the hand at all. Because I saw the previous shot, I know this is a cigarette packet but it doesn't seem as obvious in this shot although the criticism of the previous one cannot be levelled at this: it is a very strong grip this time, not just holding a crushed packet. At risk of getting shot, is it perhaps even too strong a grip? Might just be me on that one, see what others think.

I definitely agree a bit more on RHS and also the frame you mentioned, to hold this all together. But it's a really good idea and the message is coming across

Cheers,
Rob

[TIM]

This is intended as part of a series with the previous one, so the stronger grip resulting in the cigarette box being less visible does not concern me. I made the shadows intentionally like that, so I appreciate your opinion, but haven't changed them in the re-edit.

Added some space on the right with a recrop, and put it in a border that i really like... better?

[Markulous]

Originally Posted by TIM

Added some space on the right with a recrop, and put it in a border that i really like... better?

Space: better!
Not too sure about border...... even if it was the same tone (which I think it needs to be)