Yay or nay?

JMitchell · 06-10-2007, 11:26

Attempt at some, well, what would you call it, neo-modernism...

Works or no? Or just thoughts on it without a category...

tfl

fionaB · 06-10-2007, 11:27

sorry Jack, holds no interest whatsoever for me,

Fi

silkstone · 06-10-2007, 11:52

In itself it's a decent abstract but without a focal point. It could make a good background for something on the wide panel on the right.

The strip just left of centre bothers me a little because it doesn't seem quite vertical.

Just my 2p.

P.S. With a splash of colour it would have Mondrian overtones, which I see you like from your siggy.

JMitchell · 06-10-2007, 11:55

You're right it isn't, wasn't sure if anyone'd notice....it was meant to just be an abstract focussing on creating geometrical shapes...

**Markulous** · 06-10-2007, 11:57

For me, it's the oval thingy on LHS - needs more definition (or more interesting clouds?). Be tempted to give the image some sort of filter/treatment to push it further into the abstract

JMitchell · 06-10-2007, 15:49

It's a mirror, so not so sure what I could do with it....(the oval that is...) might experiment with some filters.....

JMitchell · 06-10-2007, 16:22

Quote:

Originally Posted by silkstone

P.S. With a splash of colour it would have Mondrian overtones, which I see you like from your siggy.

Ok mods I'm happy for you to move this thread now there's 2 images, but inspired by you Silky, I modified the theme a little and produce this, my take on the Mondrian image (Tableau II, look it up if you aint seen it

), using the shapes from my photo:

Thoughts?

(or do you think I should put it in another thread so more people see it?

)

Summerleft · 06-10-2007, 16:24

I agree with some colour being injected and for some reason i want to take off the last strip of wood on the right, i think it would make a nice large canvas on some MD's wall then. But thats just my O.

yes like the above lol that appeared after I typed lol

**Markulous** · 06-10-2007, 16:33

Thread moved, as per request

Like the "Mondrian" tho' I'll admit to liking Mondrian better!

This has kind of taken it into different territory - equally interesting but I'd like to see you progress the original

silkstone · 06-10-2007, 16:34

Well that's pretty, er, cool.

IMO there's a little too much black on the left, so I'd crop a bit off that.

JMitchell · 06-10-2007, 16:55

Bad monitor silk? That's dark blue....

Summerleft · 06-10-2007, 17:02

oh cripes i really had to stare at it too see it was dark blue! pants monitor here too lol

**Markulous** · 06-10-2007, 17:06

Quote:

Originally Posted by JMitchell

Bad monitor silk? That's dark blue....

Mondrian would've used black, I'm sure!

(and my monitor shows it as black!

)

Les Meehan · 06-10-2007, 17:19

I like the original as it stands. The paler section just off centre adds a little bit of unease which I like in pics. The horizontal scratch marks beg a question, i.e. who did that?, which I also like.

If it were mine I might play around with the uneven tone from top to bottom to hold attention in the image but apart from that I like it.

Les

PS It's a Mitchell not a Modrian and should be judged on that!

silkstone · 06-10-2007, 17:29

Quote:

Originally Posted by JMitchell

06-10-2007, 11:26	#1 (permalink)
JMitchell Feet under the table Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: London, England Posts: 3,498	Yay or nay? Attempt at some, well, what would you call it, neo-modernism... Works or no? Or just thoughts on it without a category... tfl

06-10-2007, 11:27	#2 (permalink)
fionaB Loves the place Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Scotland Posts: 5,413	Re: Yay or nay? sorry Jack, holds no interest whatsoever for me, Fi

06-10-2007, 11:52	#3 (permalink)
silkstone Feet under the table Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Silkstone Common, Yorkshire, UK Posts: 3,374	Re: Yay or nay? In itself it's a decent abstract but without a focal point. It could make a good background for something on the wide panel on the right. The strip just left of centre bothers me a little because it doesn't seem quite vertical. Just my 2p. P.S. With a splash of colour it would have Mondrian overtones, which I see you like from your siggy.

06-10-2007, 11:55	#4 (permalink)
JMitchell Feet under the table Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: London, England Posts: 3,498	Re: Yay or nay? You're right it isn't, wasn't sure if anyone'd notice....it was meant to just be an abstract focussing on creating geometrical shapes...

06-10-2007, 11:57	#5 (permalink)
Markulous Pixalo Crew Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Peak District Posts: 9,690	Re: Yay or nay? For me, it's the oval thingy on LHS - needs more definition (or more interesting clouds?). Be tempted to give the image some sort of filter/treatment to push it further into the abstract

06-10-2007, 15:49	#6 (permalink)
JMitchell Feet under the table Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: London, England Posts: 3,498	Re: Yay or nay? It's a mirror, so not so sure what I could do with it....(the oval that is...) might experiment with some filters.....

06-10-2007, 16:24	#8 (permalink)
Summerleft Feet under the table Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Derbyshire, UK Posts: 1,567	Re: Yay or nay? I agree with some colour being injected and for some reason i want to take off the last strip of wood on the right, i think it would make a nice large canvas on some MD's wall then. But thats just my O. yes like the above lol that appeared after I typed lol

06-10-2007, 16:33	#9 (permalink)
Markulous Pixalo Crew Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Peak District Posts: 9,690	Re: Yay or nay? Thread moved, as per request Like the "Mondrian" tho' I'll admit to liking Mondrian better! This has kind of taken it into different territory - equally interesting but I'd like to see you progress the original

06-10-2007, 16:34	#10 (permalink)
silkstone Feet under the table Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Silkstone Common, Yorkshire, UK Posts: 3,374	Re: Yay or nay? Well that's pretty, er, cool. IMO there's a little too much black on the left, so I'd crop a bit off that.

06-10-2007, 16:55	#11 (permalink)
JMitchell Feet under the table Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: London, England Posts: 3,498	Re: Yay or nay? Bad monitor silk? That's dark blue....

06-10-2007, 17:02	#12 (permalink)
Summerleft Feet under the table Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Derbyshire, UK Posts: 1,567	Re: Yay or nay? oh cripes i really had to stare at it too see it was dark blue! pants monitor here too lol

06-10-2007, 17:19	#14 (permalink)
Les Meehan Forum Regular Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: I conduct workshops in Andalucia, Spain Posts: 778	Re: Yay or nay? I like the original as it stands. The paler section just off centre adds a little bit of unease which I like in pics. The horizontal scratch marks beg a question, i.e. who did that?, which I also like. If it were mine I might play around with the uneven tone from top to bottom to hold attention in the image but apart from that I like it. Les PS It's a Mitchell not a Modrian and should be judged on that!